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POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Tue Aug 07, 2018 3:43 am

Before the Sun chose to overtake
Our lives, our life, He can't relate,
He made a water all steaming blue,
I can't believe I haven't thought of you....

Symbolism, I love the might
Of what blossoms there after the dawn of night.
Full stature, statues gain height...

I love you after the end of night.
Dig your dagger into the struggled flight
As you dig into your next delight.
Nothing is lost, nothing right,
As we both stare into this water bright.
Fog upon fog,
We stare yet into this water bright.

I's that I remember;
Emerald colored dream.
I get lost in their stare
When there's nobody home but
Remember to share
The pond where we sit and boil our sight.

Laugh from the skies.
Don't you try to say
You don't remember the cat?
Imagine that.
Her face was adorned
With the treasures.
Rosetta, don't you remember
Why they always bring you along?

Chemical green is a sordid hue.
I feel that my reply would surprise you,
But really it's all just like it's meant to be:
Anger in fine swords, spread at my display.
I could have chosen to mark my tread but
The vision didn't set any limit.
Nothing is going to break the judgment
Except a narrow chance of hope.
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
- LXV 5:59
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Wed Aug 15, 2018 6:20 am

very pretty imagery
reminds me of sitting under a tree
gazing into dew drops hoping to see
how the past and future just might be
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Sat Aug 18, 2018 2:40 am

Corvinae wrote:very pretty imagery
reminds me of sitting under a tree
gazing into dew drops hoping to see
how the past and future just might be

Thanks. Do the dew drops have anything good? Cool name! :)

I wrote that one roughly 10 years ago... My muse is dried up for the time being. That typically means it's time to retire from the world (by "retire" I mean the mindfully self-induced reclusion from samjna) and meditate. 'Tis the long road I seek. ;)
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
- LXV 5:59
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Sat Aug 18, 2018 5:53 am

seekinghga wrote:
Corvinae wrote:very pretty imagery
reminds me of sitting under a tree
gazing into dew drops hoping to see
how the past and future just might be

Thanks. Do the dew drops have anything good? Cool name! :)

I wrote that one roughly 10 years ago... My muse is dried up for the time being. That typically means it's time to retire from the world (by "retire" I mean the mindfully self-induced reclusion from samjna) and meditate. 'Tis the long road I seek. ;)


Dew drops are filled with sugar magnolia
the drink of the gods we call ambrosia
if I drink enough, Ill forget I know ya
and spend my days singing DoReMeFaSoLaTiDa

cant hide my soul by a name once you know me
my words and song make it easy to see
the silly little lass climbing a tree
who is always star struck by your sweet poetry

tis time to retire and gather up what weve sown
the years spin by and our harvest is our own
when we wake from our rest our soul will have grown
and we be ready to redecorate our blessed home
:D :angel:
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Mon Aug 27, 2018 4:58 am

Corvinae wrote:Dew drops are filled with sugar magnolia
the drink of the gods we call ambrosia
if I drink enough, Ill forget I know ya
and spend my days singing DoReMeFaSoLaTiDa

cant hide my soul by a name once you know me
my words and song make it easy to see
the silly little lass climbing a tree
who is always star struck by your sweet poetry

tis time to retire and gather up what weve sown
the years spin by and our harvest is our own
when we wake from our rest our soul will have grown
and we be ready to redecorate our blessed home
:D :angel:

That's a really good poem, thanks for sharing. :) Contemporary stuff is pretty bad. You know what wins awards in poetry today? They write a paragraph, vivisect the lines and stagger the segments one over the other to give them the illusion of meter. Though, you did cheat on the last line of the last stanza of this one by resorting to assonance... ;)

Hey, seekinghga, Jesus once said that they who harbor not trangressions in poetry can be the first to cast their rocks and sticks. :P
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Mon Aug 27, 2018 5:24 am

Casting rocks and sticks I see.....
I know more about that then most

I didnt cheat at all in my poetry
The words come out quite naturally
Nature set her own rythem and reason
She spins the earth to give us dogs
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Mon Aug 27, 2018 6:03 am

Corvinae wrote:Casting rocks and sticks I see.....
I know more about that then most

You think that you toss sticks and stones more than me? Is that a challenge?

I didnt cheat at all in my poetry
The words come out quite naturally
Nature set her own rythem and reason
She spins the earth to give us dogs

I'm just messing. I studied at the school of Lennon, Stipe, Staley, Madonna, Cornell, Butler, Braxton and Waters. Their works are replete with assonance. :P
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Mon Aug 27, 2018 6:10 am

I dont want to toss sticks and stones anymore
They break my bones
And the words I can never seem to find

I know your messing
And I know why
No one likes to see anybody cry
Life is hard and gives us lessons
All poetry starts in the sky
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Tue Aug 28, 2018 8:23 am

King For One Day
circa 2014
---------------------------
I shoulda looked high up, I shoulda looked low
Looked out for myself, yeah, but I didn't know
She'd bounce me around like a ball on a string
Now I can't get enough sweet venom from her sting

The wind in her dark hair, her sunglasses cool,
Her lipstick is fire, man, she knows what to do
To tangle with my mind and bend to her will
A lucky fool like me who's caught up in her thrill

Drivin' through town she's got her hands on the wheel
I just go where she wants, she's got me under her heel
You may say that I'm weak yet why can't you see
That cruisin' like this is where I want to be?

Come the early light of dawn
When the world is still asleep
She turns her head and smiles at me
And everything's alright

Standing here with her upon this beach
Where we know,
I always knew it that forever was too long...
So in this moment
We lock our eyes for one last time
Then say goodbye...
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Tue Aug 28, 2018 2:00 pm

...?

Oh Brother

...!

Your killing me.
I want a happy ending, not some dots...
Had It HAD IT had it with dot dot dots.

Just messing with ya.
Very nice
But i rewrote your ending
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Tue Aug 28, 2018 2:00 pm

Goodbye is a way
In which To say
 god be with thee.
That is silly to say
I dont see it that way
When parting from love and kin
Its better to say
Merry part till one day
 to merry meet again.

There are no goodbyes
No time telling lies
For god is always with thee.

Just words said out loud
Stardust formed clouds
To remember the siver cord.
Remember the silver chord
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Tue Aug 28, 2018 2:08 pm

Corvinae wrote:Goodbye is a way
In which To say
 god be with thee.
That is silly to say
I dont see it that way
When parting from love and kin
Its better to say
Merry part till one day
 to merry meet again.

There are no goodbyes
No time telling lies
For god is always with thee.

Just words said out loud
Stardust formed clouds
To remember the siver cord.
Remember the silver chord

I wrote that in May, 2014. Long before I knew you, Corvinae. :) I DO love you, but not like THAT. :P
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Tue Aug 28, 2018 2:43 pm

I know.
I saw your date
I dont have dark hair
And lipstick is made with dead animals
So thats gross

I just want you to have a happy ending too
And those dots

Just opened my heart
To mess with ya

Im moving soon and saying goodbye to this home....
So i took an opportunity
To poetry slam
Because i can

Luv u too Bro
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Tue Aug 28, 2018 2:53 pm

Corvinae wrote:I know.
I saw your date
I dont have dark hair
And lipstick is made with dead animals
So thats gross

Eww. I'll strike it from my lexicon all together. :)

Luv u too Bro

*hugs*
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby Corvinae » Tue Aug 28, 2018 3:23 pm

Just something to think about next time you think about locking lips with a lady.....yummy fish scales and whale fat.

Hope your muse returns soon and you can write more poetry. Your very good and courageous to share and the world needs good courageous people. Thank you for sharing yourself with us.
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Re: POEM: Scrutiny

Postby seekinghga » Tue Aug 28, 2018 3:33 pm

Corvinae wrote:Just something to think about next time you think about locking lips with a lady.....yummy fish scales and whale fat.

Hope your muse returns soon and you can write more poetry. Your very good and courageous to share and the world needs good courageous people. Thank you for sharing yourself with us.

"I am Nuit, and my word is six and fifty. Divide, add, multiply, and understand."

I'm an {***hole}, but at least I'm consistent! :)
"And they that read the book and debated thereon passed into the desolate land of Barren Words. And they that sealed up the book into their blood were the chosen of Adonai, and the Thought of Adonai was a Word and a Deed; and they abode in the Land that the far-off travellers call Naught."
- LXV 5:59
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